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PostSubject: A Bird's Last Message   Wed Jul 27, 2011 4:34 am

This is a poem that I just wrote, laying on the bed lol It's about a bird who's about to die because of an unknown disease. Without a further ado, here it is:

I opened my eyes,
To find myself in a cage,
I tried to remember,
But to no avail.

I looked around myself,
And saw nothing more,
Than my young master,
Crying besides my bed.

His tears falling down,
Forced me to get up,
To tell him to stop,
But could not do so.

I could not get up,
Let alone lift a muscle,
I tried to speak,
But felt endless pain.

I then remembered,
What had happened to me,
I was dying from a disease,
Whose cure unknown.


Decaying I laid,
Inside the cage,
Where I spent my life,
Blissfully with my master.

My sight now blurring,
I know it's time,
But before I went,
I wish I could've said good bye.

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Wed Jul 27, 2011 4:47 am

Like I said, it's soo touching. Sometimes, I imagine the boy had the disease while his father is crying in despair. Or vice-versa. XD

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Wed Jul 27, 2011 4:49 am

Xiie wrote:
Like I said, it's soo touching. Sometimes, I imagine the boy had the disease while his father is crying in despair. Or vice-versa. XD

That could be an idea for a new poem Xiie.... nevertheless, I thank you for the compliment :D

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Wed Jul 27, 2011 4:52 am

T-T That is so...touching as Xiie said. I imagine some sort of servant lady, maybe a maid, with her male master whom are both in love being pained from her unfortunate demise...(not sure why it is actually a bird though...)

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Wed Jul 27, 2011 6:09 am

Thanks Notte. And I didn't think that it would suit a scene that you described. Still, I wrote what I felt and thought. Thas' what I do :D But thanks for the comments gaise~

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Sat Jul 30, 2011 11:17 pm

That's how poetry is written. with feelings. If that was what the intended scene was or not, i don't know...but, through metaphors, that is what i saw.

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Sun Jul 31, 2011 3:24 am

Sometimes, I cannot understand the true meaning of each poems. Only when someone gives me a clue. >:

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Sun Jul 31, 2011 3:29 am

The true meaning is that which rests within what the reader sees one could say. But the original meaning is what was felt by that whom wrote the poem.

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Sun Jul 31, 2011 3:40 am

I wonder how they can do stuff like that. O-o;

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Sun Jul 31, 2011 5:12 am

Poems are emotional, that's why. :)


Also, Bas. The smiley team awards this with their praise:

:cheer: :clap: :cheer:

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Sun Jul 31, 2011 10:13 am

Why, thank you Notte. I am honored :)

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Wed Aug 03, 2011 11:39 am

Wow this is good poem! I love it!
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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Thu Aug 04, 2011 2:31 pm

Thanks Prince =w= I wish I could write better though.....

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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Thu Aug 04, 2011 6:26 pm

What are you talkin about you write AWSOME!
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PostSubject: Re: A Bird's Last Message   Fri Aug 05, 2011 5:29 pm

OwO Thanks I guess. I'm not feeling like posting my new poem ATM, but if it gets good feedback, then I will >:3

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