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PostSubject: One Piece; Revolution   Fri Jul 08, 2011 7:50 pm

I decided to start making a continuation of the One Piece story. It's basically set way in the future ( 30-40 Years? ) Where a... Well I'll just post the story, you'll understand.

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Chapter 1 : New Pirate enters the Grand Era!
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Chapter 2 : Prison Break and a Brand New Rival!
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Chapter 3 : Duel on Mt. XIII
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Chapter 4 : One Bullet can Pierce the World
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Chapter 5 : Six Devil Fruit Clash?!
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Chapter 6 : Aura vs. Zaki
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Any tips are appreciated, thanks!
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PostSubject: Re: One Piece; Revolution   Sat Jul 09, 2011 8:30 am

That was truly amazing. I loved their fights, however, there were some typos here and there, like where you were supposed to use "their", you used "they're". But the explanation of the scenarios was enough to make people picture the scene in their head. Great job, looking forward to Chapter 7. Also, can it be possible that after a series of events Tatsuo sides with Salamander?

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PostSubject: Re: One Piece; Revolution   Sat Jul 09, 2011 4:59 pm

Thanks for the feedback Basil, greatly appreciated! Sorry for the typos, I used an Online Spelling check but it didn't seem to work I guess :/

I have the idea planned perfectly, before I even made the actual text I panned everything out in my head, and I still am. Everything's here, I just need to write it.
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PostSubject: Re: One Piece; Revolution   Sun Jul 10, 2011 11:53 am

Please use Nami and Luffy. I love those guys T_T; Good work nonetheless. and Good luck for your upcoming stories. Looking forward for catfights too.

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